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By Kim Carmichael

On The Dotted Line is your classic tale of a mega-rich guy (Randolph), who must meet some familial demand to marry by a certain age, who meets a poor girl (Willow) who’s in desperate need of cash in a hurry. Randolph makes a proposal he knows Willow can’t refuse, followed by the very quick race down the aisle in order to meet the deadline. And yes, they make it just in time.

Despite the hot sex, drama and confusion take place on almost every page. Randolph likes Willow, but won’t tell her because he thinks she only married him for money. She did. Willow likes Randolph, but won’t tell him because she thinks he only married her for money. He did. This scenario sets the scene for almost the entire book. When they get close to admitting their feelings for each other, something inevitably interrupts them (mostly their own thoughts) and the moment is lost.

They finally share their feelings for one another and things run smoothly for a little while. But the story wouldn’t be complete without one final act that tears them apart. Most of the characters have secrets and lies that you just know will unravel at the most inopportune time. Randolph thinks it’s best to let Willow go, and Willow leaves as it’s what Randolph wants. This leaves both of them to wonder why the other one didn’t fight for them. Both come to their senses seemingly at the same time and POW!!! … you end up with your HEA.

Sadly, I don’t know why I bought this book. It’s a theme I’ve read a few times before and to be honest, these stories never change or come up with new twists. Maybe that’s why I really struggled to finish this book: it just didn’t engage me. It didn’t keep my up all night. It didn’t scream out to me to pick it back up when I put it down. I slogged through it just so I could finish it to move on to my next book.

I also had trouble following the conversations throughout this book. I can’t really explain it other than when reading conversations between characters, I always felt like I had missed something. The conversations were stilted and disjointed and I was left wondering how the characters got from Point A to Point B while they were talking.

On The Dotted Line

My Rating:

By Shyloh and Alex Morgan

Sadly the time has come for me to do something I really don’t like having to do: Give a 1 heart review.

Chasing Midnight sounded very promising, but unfortunately I had to give up the chase just before the 50% mark. I have read over 500 books these past few years and I can honestly say I can count on one hand the number of books I haven’t been able to finish. I won’t say I hated it, but it did frustrate me to the point that I simply could not go on.

I didn’t want to be too critical, but here are the 5 main reasons I couldn’t finish it.

1 Too many characters (some I felt were unnecessary) are introduced at the beginning of the book and I was left struggling to remember who was who and who belonged to what family. Misery has at least three siblings (that I can remember) and for each sibling she uses their real name and their nickname, sometimes in the same sentence. I just couldn’t keep up.

2 POV changes constantly and without any notice. Because of the POV changes, there’s quite a bit of scene repetition and backtracking in time as you read about what was going through each of the character’s heads.

3 This book also includes secondary stories about Quinn’s brother Chance and sister Syra, and their love lives. This had me thinking I was going to read three stories in one and really drags out the book.

4 The repetitiveness of the characters dramas are too much. Mhisery’s father is a drunk and an embarrassment. Quinn raised his younger siblings after his parents died. Chance is worried about Alyssa’s reputation after being seen in public with him. We got it the first time. There’s no need to keep bringing it up.

5 The descriptive words that popped up only during the sex scenes left me discombobulated. Nothing fizzles out a fire quicker than having to look up the definition of a word: Mhisery educed Quinn’s shirt; and She wanted to feel his erection against her integument. One word was so weird I still have not been able to find a definition for it on the internet: Her hand apperceived his sizable erection. And I’m not sure why the authors had a problem with just using regular words: his teeth grazing against her derma (skin/flesh); She explored his portal (mouth) completely; Her hand smoothed over the surface of her smooth, ink-covered epidermis (skin/flesh); and He nipped her epithelium (skin/flesh).

Now while this book was not for me, you might enjoy it. On Amazon and Goodreads it does have at least a “4.6 out of 5” rating, so obviously most people are loving it.

I apologise to Shyloh and Alex if my review offends or upsets them, but I swore I was always going to be honest in my reviews.